Writing Mistakes I’ve Made and How To Avoid Them pt. 2

This is part two of me sharing the mistakes I’ve encountered so far in my writing career and what you can do to avoid them. This week I share two more topics that have gotten me in trouble.

-Rapid storytelling

I’ve had people critique my writing and claimed I was going too fast with the story. They suggested I slow it down and show more sensory details in my writing so the reader can be in the moment. I completely agree with this. Sometimes I write too fast and leave out details that I mistakenly assume my audience would know or be able to infer but they can’t.

Don’t make this mistake.

Take your time as you write your story and don’t treat it like a rush job. If writing is your passion than the writing should be the best part even if it’s hard at times. Take the time to close your eyes and picture the scene in your head. Don’t assume your readers will see everything you see and not put it in the story. It’s the little things that count when it comes to detail.

-The use of fluff

“Fluff” are words you use to add more to a sentence than is necessary. Think back to when you were in school and a paper had to be a certain length and you keep adding words to a sentence to make the page longer because you’ve won out of ideas.

For example, the sentence could say, “The dog chased the cat into the hole under the house”

But because you’ve added fluff to make it longer it says something like, “The brown and black nosey dog slowly but carefully chased the shy cat that belong to the old lady daughter down into the black filthy hole under the house that belonged to the milk man.”

Don’t do this. Yeah, it has a lot of details but the sentence is longer than it has to be and it could easily be broken up. There’s a difference between adding words to enhance and adding words to just add length.

Read it out loud. If you’re out of breath by the time the sentence is over your readers may be too and that’s a clear warning sign.


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Shaquanda Dalton

Hello, my name is Shaquanda Dalton and welcome to Learnasyouwrite.com! I'm from Milwaukee, Wisconsin and graudated from the University of Wisconsin-Milwaukee with a degree in Creative Writing. I fell in love with writing at the age nine and love it till this day. :)


  1. Nadia

    Great tips, especially with the fluff (I’m guilty of this when it comes to descriptions and setting) I will have to keep these in mind for my rewrite! Shaquanda you’re personal struggles and successes with writing really speak to me, I love how direct and engaging your advice is, it’s like talking to a great friend! 🙂

    • Shaquanda Dalton

      Aw, thank you Nadia. I’m glad you’re enjoying the blog and it’s helpful for you. Yes we all struggle and we all have our moments of accomplishments but we can’t let them hold us back. -Shaquanda